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Stargaze

Sick of sunlight.
Sit quietly, stoically waiting.
Stars march into the sky.
Soldiers of light staring back,
Shimmering silently.
Wide eyes dilated
Countless specks glitter.
Diamond flecks superimposed
Against a dream-inducing sky.
Standing alone, a single soul.
staring deep into the darkness.


Autumn Rising

Revel in the sweet-smelling
pseudo death
passing pleasantly
between trees.
Leaves fall- bowing
before the trees’ feet.

Standing on the valley side,
amid the everchange.

See the stoic evergreen
oblivious to the orange
explosion unfolding
in slow motion.


An autumn morning
The world seems tired.
Antique. In need of sleep.

Await dawn on a dirt road
among green and gold.

No pause, breath deep
the morning cold.

Surreality fades with the night.
In it’s place, lucidity
rains down with the light.
Just a few short poems I had lying around. Getting a little late for autumn poetry, but there are still leaves on the trees, so I figure it's okay. Luckily, stars never go out of style.

And speaking of stars, I have to mention the view of the shiny little buggers out in the country here. Being a city kid most of my life (all nineteen short years) I'm always amazed at how many more stars there are outside the city without all that interference from the streetlights and Wal-Mart. I'll stand outside looking up until my neck cramps ^^;. It's really cool because you can actually see the Milky Way.

:shamrock: :peace:
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creepy-cupcake Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2007
it's great but not my kinda poetry....so i'm not one to notice if a line is forced or not or any other useful comments..um WELL DONE BABE :D

:hug:hope i can chat to you today on msn
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:aww: Well thanks for the sweet comment. I appreciate it.

:glomp: I'm sorry I haven't been able to get to the computer lately. I've got another christmas card due soon, and I've been frantically trying to get it finished...
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MikeRainsAcid Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2007
Now THAT'S a style I wish I could see more of! I think they're all very well written! There were a couple places where the wording seemed a little awkward, but aside from that very nicely done!

I know what you mean about the stars. There was a red moon last time I went to visit my gramps, and he dragged me outside to see it. I didn't stay out very long, it was freezing and I was in meh Pj's (for me boxers and a tank top, and standing barefoot in ankle deep snow isn't very pleasant when you just got out of a warm bed), but it was beautiful against the stars!
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
^^; Hahaha, thanks. Yeah, some of the lines are a little forced, but I couldn't think of anything better. I did fix the last line of 'Stargaze', though. It sounds a bit better...

:D Haha, yeah. As cool as the stars are, they're not worth getting frost bite over.
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MikeRainsAcid Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2007
Hey, we all have those moments!!! Alot of my poetry is forced. I hate that. You think of one good line for a poem, but you have to kind of force the rest of it.

HAHAHA! Yeah...no....plus, being from hell, I don't do very well when it's cold.
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, I'll have a couple really solid lines, but the rest gets a little... not good-ish... ^^;

:XD: hahaha. Hey, I'm from Erie the ice cube, and I still can't take it ^^;. I think I'm just a big wuss all around.
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MikeRainsAcid Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2007
I just thought of a funny quote I read somewhere:

"Genius by birth,
Lazy by choice"
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:XD: That's awesome.
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MikeRainsAcid Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2007
I know! But I'm a loser because I stoled it from Naruto....^.^'
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nah, you're not a loser. Besides, I think Naruto must have stolen it from somewhere else, becasue I've seen it other places.
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MikeRainsAcid Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2007
^.^' Yeah...it sucks. I have an entire notebook filled with lines of poems that I've started but haven't been able to finish.

HAHAHA!!! That was lame, but funny at the same time! XP

Psh, naw you're not a wuss! Just intolerant to extreme temps. You'd probably fry like an egg down here. ^.^' Thats why I try to avoid eaving the house in summer.
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have a few pages of stull like that... But when I get enough pieces, I try and jam 'em all together. It's weird, but it's like they're all bits of the same thought when I get done.

^.^' Yeah, I was all tapped out of jokes...

Ugh, yup. I would definitely be one crispy critter. I don't handle that UV radiation very well. ^.^' Ditto.
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MikeRainsAcid Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2007
Yeah, I've tried doing that before. I've actually managed to make a few decent poems by doing that, but there's still alot of unused raw lines that need polishing and expanding.

^.^ I know how you feel.

Haha! Yeah, me neither. The only reason I'm as tan as I am (which isn't very) is because I take boiling hot baths which burns the skin and semi-tans it.
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lifeisunderrated Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Whenever I have leftover lines like that, I just siphon off what I need, cross it out of my book, and copy the poem down somewhere else. Then when I come up with new stuff I just add more into the book. That way I don't reuse the same lines over and over.

It was all that Tryptophan (Is that how it's spelled? I don't know...)

I do that every morning and I'm still the whitest thing this side of printing paper ^^;. I shower with just the hot water on. Steam just rolls off me when I leave the shower and go up to my room. I never tan, I just get more freckles if I burn in the summer.
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